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grammar help?

Dear grammar mamas,

Help!

I think this is a run-on sentence, but can't figure out how to shorten it and still include all the information in it:

Since 1996, women in California have regularly submitted short
articles, art and poetry to The Fire Inside, the quarterly newsletter
of California Coalition for Women Prisoners, an advocacy group for
incarcerated women in California.

Suggestions?

By PhoenixRising at 09/04/2007 - 9:09pm | More Stuff to Discuss! | login or register to post comments | previous forum topic | next forum topic

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does it have to stay one

does it have to stay one sentence?

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By tenderfoot at Tue, 09/04/2007 - 9:14pm | login or register to post comments

answer

No. But I want the focus to stay on the women prisoners writing for this newspaper, not CCWP (the group doing the newspaper). If that makes sense.

Sometimes paper is the only thing that will listen to you.

By PhoenixRising at Tue, 09/04/2007 - 9:37pm | login or register to post comments

A true run-on sentence is

A true run-on sentence is not grammatically correct, which your sentence is, so no worries. It is long. Maybe another sentence that emphasizes the women writers after the following, sort of a sandwich?

Since 1996, women in California have regularly submitted short articles, art and poetry to The Fire Inside. This publication is a quarterly newsletter of the California Coalition for Women Prisoners, an advocacy group for incarcerated women in California.

By Lone Star Ma at Thu, 09/06/2007 - 1:46am | login or register to post comments