A marionette?

How's your string puppet?
Does she follow your lead?
Does she dance all the steps,
at the right time and speed?

Does she follow with grace,
the move of your hand?
Does she twist and she twirl,
as fast as she can?

Are the moves that she makes,
as you wrote in your play?
When she's done for the day,
does she go on the shelf,
to be out of the way?

Nothing more then a cold wooden toy,
when you're out on the town.
Does she dance back to life,
when she's under your hand?

But,... you know,
if your puppets not laughing
or behaving just right,
if you pull on her strings
and she seems to tug back.
Maybe what you have
isn't a puppet at all
but with bones, blood and flesh,
a real human girl.

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good stuff, some minor typos...

2nd stanza 4th line "self" should be "shelf", right?
4th stanza, 2nd line "your" should be "you're"
4th stanza i would change second "back" to somthing different like "when she's under your hands"

also, i wouldn't use "dance" 3 times in such a short poem, i suggest 4th stanza "Does she spring back to life" and last stanza, "not laughing or (moving, responding, something more descriptive than a word repeated a 3rd time)

Maple, I am so glad you posted something and it's really good, i get it on a few different levels, knowing bit about you & it's well written. keep writing.

Thank you!

Thanks for the comments, I made some changes!